Gabriel- The First

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Civvie Stuff tall, slim, with some muscles
Name: Gabriel,
Age: Unknown
Sex: Unknown but looks rather male
Nationality: none
Occupation: Fighting evil the heavens,
Species: Angle/man
Celebrity Claim: Aaron Johnson
Hair color/style: Black, chin length, wavy,
Eyes: Grey/crystallized
Description: wears long loose black coats, with shoes...he looks like a normal guy. He also has a star of David on his chest.

Hero Stuff When in his real form he has wings which are transparent, he also runs around bare footed. When in his man form,
Name:The first
Type Of Hero: Dark Angle
Henshin Device/Sequence: Bright light, their star of David lights up
Forms:

• Form Name:
  Appearance:
  Transformation:
  Weapons and Abilities:flight
  Finisher(s):
  
  
• Form Name:
  Appearance:
  Transformation:
  Weapons and Abilities:fire attack
  Finisher(s):
  
  
• Form Name:
  Appearance:
  Transformation:
  Weapons and Abilities:memo-control
  Finisher(s):
  

Other Equipment:

• Hand Gunx2
  
• shot gun
  
• the thing from scareface...just for fun!
  

Inside Stuff
Personality: Dedicated, lonely, vengeful,
Strengths: speed, force, strength,

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Weaknesses: unjust crimes, water, ice, high-tec bombs,

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History: The doctors thought he was a still birth, and the body was buried outside Jerusalem, then he was taken and serves to protect people...cheesy? When he returned to Jerusalem he found his birth parents slaughtered and seeks his own revenge on the bandits that did it.
Anything Else: although he was born BC, by know he serves AD
Sample RP:
New York City,
Mugging.
The first is on his was home when he passes an alleyway, which cries are coming from. When he gets down there he finds three muggers surrounding an old man. He runs up to stop but gets pushed away by one of the muggers who tells him to get lost. Pretending to run off and get help, Gabriel really runs behind the wall where he transforms into full form. Without saying anything, he causes the muggers to fall in the ground in terror as they remember past trauma's. In the mean time the man getting mugged manages to run away, but in the shadows a cop is watching. Who after seeing what happened to the muggers starts to shoot in fear at Gabriel. This forces him on the ground, and with what time he has he makes a shield of fire which he quickly pushes out causing the whole alley to be en flamed and the cop running away for his life.

[Kiriha Kyuuseishu]

I know this is a work in progress, but you really need to fix up your Civilian information; it's a mess, the same with anything under personality; there are bullets for a reason.

[Arthur Ingram]

Right, what you need to do:

• Surely you mean Angel not Angle.
  
• "tall, slim, with some muscles" should go under description. And the description should be longer, maybe make it into sentences rather than just a few words?
  
• What is "The thing from scarface"?
  

[[Kaisu] Elizabeth Clarke]

On a more or less different note, I really hope you do the whole 'angel' thing well.